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Great information!!! (Reply to this comment)
by Sasha62
Thanks for giving us a jumping off point, most of the bike buying guides assume you're either training for the Tour de France or going for a role in the Mountain Dew commercials! Your advice was for the rest of us. I especially like your suggestions for used bikes at specialty stores.
Thanks,
Scott and Julie Fey
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Jul 24 '02
8:12 pm PDT
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You have a lot of good information... (Reply to this comment)
by bdb55
but you need to organize it a little better. Having the entire review as one paragraph makes it harder to read, it will be greatly improved if you divide it up it into a few separate paragraphs, each with its own focus (i.e. introduction, department store bikes, used bikes, leftover bikes, recommendations, conclusion). You also have a few minor spelling/grammar mistakes that detract from the review (misusing "your" in the title isn't a great way to lure in readers [should be you're]). I'm reluctant to rate this because I think you definitely have "very helpful" advice and information, but the way you organize and execute are merely "helpful." If you spend a few minutes to fix it up, it could be much better.
bdb55
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May 19 '02
1:47 pm PDT
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