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You have a good review, you just need a little work (Reply to this comment)
by OpalMan
As Pam said you should look at your formatting to make your review a little easier to read.
I will also profer a piece of advice you are free to take or ignore. I have found that when I read a negative review, if the person included the pertinent data about the product in question or took the time to list some of the good qualities of the product, it read as a much more powerful review. If you just write the negatives it looks too much like a rant.
If you edit this, please feel free to contact me and I will be more than happy to re-read and re-rate this review.
James - Opalman
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Aug 21 '01
10:55 pm PDT
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You have a very good start here (Reply to this comment)
by diverpam
however having everything in one large paragraph greatly detracts from its readability.
If you break it up into paragraphs and add headings it will make it much easier to read and comprehend. Bold and italics would also be very helpful for emphasis.
I'll be happy to help you if I can and will re-read after any revisions.
Pam
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Aug 21 '01
5:07 pm PDT
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