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Hey sweetie (Reply to this comment)
by dizzybint
Dave,
Sorry this took me a couple of days to read. Since it's been a little while since the last chapter was published, I wanted to read through from the beginning to refresh my memory.
I like how the suspense is building, that you're bringing in more international intrigue.
The part about Kalashni and the nuclear secret sort of bogged me down. If he's so loyal to his country then I'm not sure he would have gone to Southampton in the first place. However, if this technology has been known to the Soviets for so long then I found it a little unbelievable that the West didn't know it by this time. Then Foster reveals it is a dead secret and without it, the reactor might blow up. If this is the case, I would have though he would tell Kalashni this, since his since his sense of survival and concern for the planet may override any loyalty to his country.
I liked the mystery you introduced about Kershaw and his secret notebook, that definitely has potential to be very interesting.
Great job so far honey. Remember, if you want any help with the editing, just say the word.
Much love,
Caroline xxx
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Nov 22 '04
11:49 am PST
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