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Re: Re: Re: Better placement for your article would be... (Reply to this comment)
by AinsleyJo
Don't worry!
I didn't interpret your feedback as criticism of my work, and the only reason I've decided to have it remain in its present category is because of where I wanted the emphasis of the article to be, which was on the content of Patrick's speech--especially, that one part--and what an inspiration it has been to me.
Since his words were about the effects of individual acts on society, that is why I chose social studies.
But it's definitely biographical, too, because I did make Patrick, himself, come to life rather than just his words.
So placement in either category is, imo, correct with, actually, the general non-fiction being the most correct placement as it deals with a slice of Patrick's life (as well as my own life) but isn't really a biography of either of us to the extent that one might think of when viewing a biography.
There should probably actually be a topic category called "slice(s) of life" for pieces such as this.
Laters!
AJ :o)
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Mar 11 '05
10:27 pm PST
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Re: Re: Better placement for your article would be... (Reply to this comment)
by bob_tomato
My interpretation of your article, and why I suggested it's placement in the "biography" section, is that it tells not only a lot about Patrick, but about you too.
I tend to think of "social studies" as a broader, more conceptual subject that explores the various aspects of our society at large. Since this article is so specifically personal, I just see it as more suited to a biographical study.
So, this is not a criticism of your work at all - I like reading about people's personal experience. I'm just noting my difference with your choice of topic...
Andrew
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Mar 11 '05
2:31 pm PST
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Re: Better placement for your article would be... (Reply to this comment)
by AinsleyJo
That might work, too, so thanks for the suggestion.
The reason I chose social studies is because of the social message for which I'm remembering Patrick.
If I were writing his biography, I would have told more about him--though that merits telling, too.
He was born February 22, 1953 to Paul and Patricia Kline.
He has two older siblings (brother, Tim & sister, Ann) and one younger sister (Elizabeth--or Beth, for short).
He has Scandinavian good looks (though I'm not sure whether any of his ancestors ever came from there) being tall and thin with blond hair and blue eyes.
That is, the last time I saw him.
Almost seems as if his hair might have started to darken some but was still in the fair range.
For all I know, he might be totally bald now (or bald with one of those gray rings of hair) and might weigh a ton.
Considering that his dad kept his hair, I would say that Patrick has probably done the same.
A firm jaw and nice, large teeth seemed to run in the Kline family, so I would say that Patrick still has those features.
He studied to be a teacher while at college but found out that he couldn't handle the stress that comes with teaching in this day and age, so he switched careers.
Began working at Wendy's out in Minnesota and has worked his way up into the management of the same.
Unless he has since changed careers, I would say that this is still what he's been up to.
His sibs still live in Indiana, and I think I'm going to call whichever one answers first and see if he has a website, e-mail address, or anything like that and let him know that he's been given a very special and deserved place on my own website, as well as here.
I can also tell you some other neat things about Patrick that he told on himself.
When he was in fifth grade, he told about a couple of attempts he made to do something "grown-up."
One of them happened when he was either in fifth grade or else not that much younger.
He decided he was going to surprise his folks by building a fire in the fireplace.
He surprised his folks all right!!!
He forgot to open the damper and managed to make their entire house smell like smoke!!!
When he was four or five years old, he decided to make peanut butter on toast.
So, he took some bread, spread some peanut-butter on it, and toasted it.
Of course, he managed to get it stuck in the toaster, so he took a knife or fork to try to get it out and managed to get a mighty-big shock!
Fortunately, the shock wasn't strong enough to kill him or injure him seriously--but it was strong enough that he wasn't a happy camper, as shown by his next action of running through the house with tears streaming down his face while screaming, "Momeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!"
I've always loved his smile--especially, those times when there was a bit of mischief connected to it!
A few months before Patrick squirted grapefruit juice on me, John & Jackie Kennedy had a baby boy who didn't live very long.
His name was Patrick Bouvier Kennedy--and, naturally, I was thrilled that they'd named their baby Patrick.
Right after the grapefruit incident, my cousin, Barbara, was reading something about Patrick Bouvier Kennedy, and she told me that, maybe, I should call Patrick "Patrick Boo-boo Kline."
I thought that was pretty funny, so I went to school the next day and couldn't wait to call him Patrick Boo-Boo Kline.
As I said, I couldn't stay mad at that guy for long.
I've slept since then, so I can't remember whether Patrick had, himself, considered studying for the ministry or whether some of us just thought that he might make a good minister when he grew up.
He and his family were very active in the First United Methodist Church--and the Methodists eventually merged with the Evangelical United Brethern (EUB) (where my folks and I went), so, by the time that we graduated from eighth grade, we both belonged to the same denomination (but different churches).
The more I write about Patrick, the more I want to touch bases with him and see what he's been up to. I bet that, whatever he's been up to, he has brightened his corner of the world!
Blessings!
AJ :o)
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Mar 11 '05
11:52 am PST
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Better placement for your article would be... (Reply to this comment)
by bob_tomato
http://www.epinions.com/biography_member_center
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Mar 11 '05
9:56 am PST
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