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May I Suggest, DavidMac: (Reply to this comment)
by macresarf1
Give your opening a more dramatic or enticing start. The observation that a downtown street is covered with ____ is neither a novel observation nor one that draws us in.
Let me know if you do a revision.
[Macresarf1]
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May 17 '05
11:38 am PDT
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