owling's Full Review: Simon R. Green - Deathstalker: The Darkvoid Device
Owen Deathstalker is the latest lord in a Family long of line and great of honor. Unfortunately for him, he's just been outlawed by the insane Empress Lionstone XIV, and he doesn't even know why. In his attempt to escape he hitches up with outlaw Hazel D'Ark, who doesn't trust him but feels she's stuck with him. They head for the outlaw planet Mistworld, where the price on their heads is high enough to tempt even Hazel's friend Ruby Journey, the bounty hunter.
But Owen's AI, Ozymandius, has some unwelcome news. Owen's dead father left files instructing Owen to find an old rebel legend named Jack Random as the start of a grand plan of intrigue and rebellion. That plan will take Owen to lost planets, and introduce him to a number of oddities from the Hadenmen (augmented humans) to the Wolflings (genetically engineered killing machines) and even his own legendary ancestor, the Deathstalker himself. And somehow, none of these famous things turn out to be quite what Owen was expecting...
Where on earth should I start?!
I could drone on about the endless exposition (Simon Green's science fiction epic Deathstalker starts with 6 straight pages of it). I could complain about the redundant repetition that fills the book: "And then she was out of the tunnel, and the heat fell away from her like a burning blanket. She'd made her way through the obstruction. She was back in the open corridor, and the cool air was like a blessing." (My translation: "And then she was out of the tunnel, and the air was blessedly cooler. She was out of the tunnel. She was out of the tunnel, and the air was blessedly cooler.")
I could go on about the naming scheme, in which many characters' last names are blatant summaries of those characters' defining characteristics (in the spirit of that naming scheme I hereby propose that we rename the author to "Captain Obvious").
Or maybe I could natter on about the cardboard characters, many of whom change personality or intelligence level at a moment's notice. Some of them are blatant copies of each other with a few details changed. And their dialogue... Oh, dear lord, don't get me started on their dialogue. Do you have a stomach for long monologues and speeches dressed up as dialogue? What about characters who conveniently sit there and wait to attack (or whatever else) until the other character is done speechifying? Or characters who have absolutely no reason to discuss something except as a flimsy excuse to impart information to the reader? Worst of all, it usually seems as though characters do and say things for no better reason than that they must in order to push the plot in the right direction. Oh, and did I mention that they all behave like adolescents when the thought of sex comes up?
Better yet, what about the author's case of kitchen-sink-itis (as in, he's thrown everything into his book and universe but the kitchen sink, and I think that might be around here somewhere too)? Cyborgs, man-made werewolves and vampires, aliens straight out of your favorite horror movies, Lovecraftian cities, a Gibsonesque cyberspace knockoff, espers (psychics), clones, ancient and mysterious alien artifacts, family feuds, intrigue merely for the sake of intrigue... You can find the bleeding entrails of at least 15 other books and movies in here, and it ain't pretty. Green is no Lovecraft, Herbert, or Gibson.
The surprises, by the way, simply aren't surprises. There are various hidden identities in this book, from the Masked Gladiator to the traitor in the main characters' party. And not a single one is anything but obvious. The traitor really only can be one character, and the Masked Gladiator is the blatantly obvious choice. The identity of Hood, a mysterious patron of the underground, can also really only be one character when you stop and think about it. The author reveals these identities as though they're surprises, but they simply aren't.
And of course, the narration wavers in and out of various characters' voices with no rhyme or reason. Worse still, the tone is almost always off. It's flippant in the middle of dramatic events, or melodramatic to the point of hilarity when it should be merely dramatic. Horrific things are presented in an indifferent tone.
But I think I'll focus on one problem. If I didn't, after all, it would take me a week to write this review, and it would end up so long that no one would be willing to read it. I mean, really. For almost each and every page I could come up with a flaw to complain about, and this book is 521 pages long. (And did I mention the three sequels?)
So here it is:
The constant logical inconsistencies
I've never read a book that contained so many contradictions and inconsistencies. Ever. You're going to read the following examples, and some of you may be tempted to think that I'm being picky, grabbing onto a few mistakes and holding them up as a big deal. So you must understand that these are not isolated incidents. There's an inconsistency in logic to be found on nearly every page. I'm leaving out most of them in the interests of not driving you insane.
First, let's talk about the Empress and her court. When she holds court, she has the whole thing broadcast to everyone--noble and commoner alike. During court she has all of her undercover agents make contact and explain what they're doing through her esper (i.e., the esper takes on the voice and mannerisms of the agent and reports on everything he or she is doing). Supposedly the lack of a name makes the agents anonymous. Now, if you were a part of an underground movement and you watched this broadcast, and you heard a report of an agent who has infiltrated your group (really--they talk about who they've infiltrated openly), and you got a good listen to his voice and look at his mannerisms, wouldn't you go find out who the agent was and kill him within 24 hours?
Now let's talk about the Empress' funky stasis field. She uses it when questioning a man at some point. The idea is that she can "speed up time" in the stasis field, aging the man 10 years in the space of seconds--which of course she proceeds to do. Err, if the field is speeding up time, then shouldn't the guy inside of it starve to death during that decade?
In the worst scene of the entire book (don't worry, this is in the first fifth of the book--I'm not giving anything important away), a bunch of espers break into the impossible-to-break-into court room. Instead of killing the standard-issue lunatic all-powerful ruler, they... throw a cream pie in her face. They give the excuse that if they killed her someone just like her would take her place (a silly assumption, since supposedly the ruler just before her was much more reasonable), and that she somehow can't take horrific revenge for something as non-violent as a cream pie. Didn't anyone read the briefing about her being totally INSANE? She of course proceeds to kill all the espers, who with their last breath declare that they'll kill her someday (considering that they should have easily predicted that she'd kill them, that's a pretty sudden change of policy). To make matters worse, later on you find out things that make it ridiculous that the esper who threw the cream pie would have ever been that non-violent--it's simply out-of-character for her.
We're told "it wouldn't do for the lower orders to see the aristocracy dying. It might give them ideas." But the lower orders see the aristocracy die all the time in those court broadcasts.
We're told that most people in this universe are normal humans, yet I'm not actually sure that we ever see a truly normal human. Everyone is hyped up somehow--genetic advantages, genetic manipulation, psychic powers, super training, battle drugs. Nearly everyone in the book is, at one time or another, described as moving "too fast for the eye to follow."
And I simply must mention the food taster who died because he checked everyone's food but his own. Most people taste their food automatically when they eat it.
I'd try to explain the weird logic behind the fact that projectile guns have been replaced by energy guns that take two minutes to recharge between shots, but why bother? It would take several convoluted paragraphs and at least four or five inconsistencies and contradictions, and really all you need to know is that the entire thing is a plot device to justify having sword fights all through the book.
And I'm sorry, but if the adaptive horrific living alien city really wanted to kill off the people wandering through it, it would have dropped a building on them or opened the entire street up under them, rather than killing them off one at a time in as dramatic a manner as possible.
The truly amazing part is that the author himself makes his plot holes obvious by having characters handily explain why something couldn't have happened the way it happened. I think in some cases he's simply forgotten that he wrote it a different way five pages earlier, and in others he thinks that having a character say "well gee, I have no idea!" will make us think that he's thought about the issue and has a solution that we just don't know about... which I'm not buying for a second.
Characters literally contradict themselves or change their views from one sentence or page to the next. The party breezes through security just after noting that it's "tighter than ever." One character gives two separate and contradictory explanations for the creation of an alien artifact, two pages apart. The narrative notes that conditions in a chase make aiming impossible just before a character aims and blows someone away. A character notes that there aren't any sensors visible in a doorway, then holds his ring up to a sensor. And this is one of my favorite (hah!) bits of dialogue between two people:
"Those aren't real trees, any more than this is real sunlight."
Owen frowned. "You mean these trees are fakes?"
"Oh, they're real enough."
(My translation: "These trees aren't real." "You mean they aren't real?" "No, they're real.")
And did I mention that everything and its brother is dubbed the next stage of human evolution, or the most powerful esper ever created?
And how come alien cities and artifacts always kill off the bad guys so darn obligingly?
Okay, I'll stop now. Sorry. I got a little carried away there.
Saving Grace? Maybe Not
For a while I thought, "well, at least this isn't as bad as the last book I gave a single star to, because that one was rampantly misogynistic, and this one has strong (if cardboard) female characters." But that was until the main female character noted that:
"I was feeling down, and just in the mood to be bossed about and mistreated by someone big and dumb and domineering. You know how it is."
"Unfortunately, yes," Cyder admitted.
(Cyder being another strong female character.) The wording, of course, implying that it's utterly normal for any strong female to feel the need to go get battered about by some psychopathic creep when she's feeling down. Particularly since the domineering guy in question wasn't just some jerk--he was a super-violent killing machine who likes using people in the worst ways. It's one thing to have an otherwise strong character who makes a really stupid decision or two; it's another to imply that all other characters of the same race, gender, etc. would see that as reasonable and perhaps even inevitable. (It reminds me of the fact that, some number of years ago while I was growing up, there seemed to be a trend in movies to actually have strong female characters in them. But those characters could only hold their own if the "hero" of the movie wasn't involved in the fight. The moment he was around, they had to be rescued.)
Finally...
This is the kind of book that gives science fiction a bad name, that makes people think the genre as a whole is badly-written, adolescent fluff. It has almost no redeeming features, and makes every mistake and blunder in the book and then some. Twice. Maybe more like twenty or thirty times. This reads like someone's first draft that's just had a spellchecker run on it, and no other editing or rewriting. (In fact, I can't imagine that the author even re-read this once, or he would have caught some of these constant contradictions. And where the hell was his editor? Was there even an editor?)
So don't read this book--not if you have any sensitivity whatsoever to writing quality. It just isn't worth the pain.
Standard warnings: Blood. Violence. Guts. Sex. Rampant stupidity.
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